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My first cycling haiku(19 posts)

My first cycling haikuNeedSpeed
Jun 18, 2002 3:55 PM
Podium girl curses
eager cyclist sprays champagne
touseled hair now wet
Lets make this your last.refusenik
Jun 18, 2002 4:02 PM
Lets make this your last.NeedSpeed
Jun 18, 2002 4:15 PM
Poor little troll. Go back under the secluded boggy rock from whence you came.
I am trying to help. Dont bank on making it as a Haiku writer.refusenik
Jun 18, 2002 4:19 PM
refusenik: a$$h$%^ of the week! congrats rn. nmcolker
Jun 18, 2002 4:22 PM
I am going for "a$$h$%^" of the year. Wish me luck!refusenik
Jun 18, 2002 4:24 PM
Curious. How do you figure that as a Haiku? (nm)czardonic
Jun 18, 2002 4:24 PM
We're waiting NeedSpeed. How do you figure this a Haiku?refusenik
Jun 18, 2002 4:35 PM
Who's "we," sucka. (nm)czardonic
Jun 18, 2002 4:38 PM
Brah! Hey "Refusenik"....Ahimsa
Jun 18, 2002 4:48 PM
Looks like czardonic called you out like a bitch there, eh Sparky?


Refusnik: "Yeah, what kinda haiku is that, huh? Right guys? Guys? Hey uh.....guys?"

If'n yer gonna bare your teeth, make sure you intend to bite.

A. (Bite me.)
Curious. How do you figure that as a Haiku? (nm)EaNeedSpeed
Jun 18, 2002 5:01 PM
Easy: (they teach you this in high school English class BTW) Here you go ...

1st line is 5 syllables
2nd line is 7 syllables
3rd line is 5 syllables.

Got it?
Summer School for you!czardonic
Jun 18, 2002 5:10 PM
First line is not 5 syllables.

Maybe you shouldn't be relying on your mastery of high school English to critique Japanese poetry.
Jun 18, 2002 9:52 PM
we maybe spent a week on poems my freshman year. soph year was novels and essays (no poems), jr year was prep-ing for the AP, as was sr year (again, no poems). i feel underedumicated.
Curious. How do you figure that as a Haiku? (nm)NeedSpeed
Jun 18, 2002 5:05 PM
Whoops. My mistake:

Corrected version:

Podium girls curse
eager cyclist sprays champagne
touseled hair now wet

My apologies ...
Jun 18, 2002 5:17 PM
Fun fact: Before the Haiku, the most popular form of poetry in Japan was the Tanka, a 31 syllable poem in 5-7-5-7-7 format. Often, a poetic exchange would take place where one poet would compose the 5-7-5, and another would respond with the closin 7-7. So. . .

A conquest celebrated.
A small victory undone.
Well, yes, but "JS Tanka Shop" just doesn't roll well.Ahimsa
Jun 18, 2002 5:38 PM
What ever happened to "Haiku de'tat"? Why did you give that one up J?

A. (?)
I haven't been feeling so "d'etat" lately...JS Haiku Shop
Jun 19, 2002 5:38 AM
plus, it's really "J's Haiku Shop", since I'm "J". the forum handle format won't seem to allow apostrophes or a little "s" after the "J".

a fine first haiku!
and, as for the format woes-
tanka very much.

oh, and reminder:
please don't feed the trolls, board friends
you'll encourage them.
Jun 19, 2002 6:01 AM
How about a Tanka Board formatted to allow only 5-7-5 posts and 7-7 responses? That should spice thing up a bit.


ps: don't forget the limerick board.
Always room for more haiku, keep it up. nmMB1
Jun 19, 2002 7:50 AM